Dean hates himself, he knows everyone is going to leave him. Sam finds out what's wrong and tries
to fix him

http://freakn-out.livejournal.com/2670.html#cutid1

Argh, fic author! We need to work on your formatting skills. As it is now, your fic reads:

"Blah blah blah," Character J said, but Character D action. "Blah blah blah Character D is speaking."
"Blah blah blah Character J speaking again."

At the very least, Character D's line should have been in a second paragraph. It took me a moment to realize that it was supposed to be the second character speaking.

Also, your paragraph formatting is inconsistent and hard to read. On the 'net there should be a space between every paragraph. Most of your paragraphs are one right under the other, making them hard to separate out and read. And the spaces you do add in are very random in their placement. Please learn how to correctly handle paragraph formatting.

P.S.: Unless you're going for a very stylized story (which it does not appear to be the case), you need way more exposition. Nearly your whole fic is paragraphs that only take up one line on my computer, and the vast majority of them begin with dialogue too.

((Editted to change the icon to something more appropriate.))

Dear Legend of Mana fandom.

You're kinda small as far as fandoms go. Usually that's a good thing for me; less crap to browse through and all. But you had to be the exception didn't you?

I get that what I have to say has already been said before but it's amazing that such a small fandom can be so one-track, annoying and self-inserted. Would it kill you to try something maybe a little different?

( cut for ranting )

Title: The Valley of the Shadow of Death
Author: andthetramps
Pairing/Characters: Sam/Dean eventually.
Rating: R for language and that's it I think.
Summary: I'm not entirely sure where this story is going to go, so you'll have to read it and find out.
Warning: None, really.
Spoilers: Season 3 Finale. "No Rest for the Wicked."
Disclaimer: Yeah, right. I just like the idea of special Hell, so I'm hopping back on the bus.


A/N: Okay, so I lost my muse for my other story. But I promise that as soon as I get it back, I'll write more of it. This story was knocking my brain in, however, so I felt the need to do something about it. I won't lose this muse, I'm pretty certain. I have too much time to wonder about what'll happen next.

( The Valley of the Shadow of Death; Part One )

Crossposted to: inuyashanohime, jen_fics, blau_und_gold

Title: Flugel (Wings)
Genre: Angst/fluff/introspect
Rating: G
Character: Alfons Heiderich
Pairing: Implied Edward Elric x Alfons Heiderich
Note: Written to (and inspired by) Lia's "Tori no Uta"

Come hither to my Ficjournal...<3<3

...but it means SO MUCH.

Rational  =/=  Rationale

Rational:  Adjective. 1) agreeable to reason; reasonable; sensible, 2) having or exercising reason, sound judgment, or good sense, 3) of, pertaining to, or constituting reasoning powers, etc. Note: Rhymes with national. Ration-UL.

Rationale:  Noun. 1)  the fundamental reason or reasons serving to account for something, 2) a statement of reasons, 3) a reasoned exposition of principles. In rare cases, can also refer to a type of vestment  worn by some Catholic clergy. Note: Does not rhyme with national. Ration-AL.

Why must these details ruin perfectly excellent fic?

They aren't all as perfect as Edward Cullen. In fact, none of the most interesting ones are.

And just because Edward is perfect in every way, that does not mean your OC should be as well. Flaws make a person memorable and realistic. Perfection does not.

Just look at Alucard. Watch one episode of Hellsing and tell me you're going to forget about Alucard.

Go on. I dare you.

Prowl. Does. Not. Giggle.

I'm sure that's not the image the author is thinking of when they're trying to describe him laughing really quietly. There are way better words to use for a soft laugh.

Chuckle
Chortle
Amused snort
Snicker

Prowl is seen laughing once in "Sound and Fury" when Sari is swinging at the pinata. His laugh is subdued and quiet and VERY far from being a giggle.


Sari giggles.
Prowl does not.

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Wanna see icons ? Pretty boys inside!

When you're talking about the planet you need to capitalize the E in "Earth." I know you wouldn't write "mercury" or "saturn" so why do you keep writing "earth"? It looks especially ridiculous when you write something like, "The trip from earth to Mars will take three years."

"The rain fell until the earth was dark" = win.
"From space, the Earth looks like a blue marble" = win.

It's not that hard. Earth is the name of the planet. It deserves capitalization!

Title: Wrecked
Author: deviant_dev
Master List of ALL my Fics
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Dean/Sam
Disclaimer: The following is a work of fiction and does not necessarily reflect on the true sexual orientation of the individuals featured. No harmful intent or defamation of character intended. Supernatural & its characters belong to Eric Kripke, the writers, and a bunch of other people I don't even know. I'm just borrowing them to play!
Summary: Sam gives Dean what he needs.
Word Count: 1,492


I know you're looking for something, something to help take away the fear and I can give it to you, Dean